Children's story feedback for friends
Childrens' Story Draft
1)Ruffles was a small puppy, much smaller than the rest of his siblings.
Ruffles loved to play, run, jump and lick, though some things were hard for Ruffle to do.
2)What Ruffles loved most was adventures with his best friend Tommy.
Tommy and Ruffles took the same walk down to the river near Tommy's house.
3)Ruffles followed everything Tommy did.
4)Tommy would jump every crack in the sidewalk, and so would Ruffles.
5)Ruffles would huff, puffy, wiggle and jiggle. But eventually, he would do it.
6)Tommy would roll down down the hill until he reached the bottom.
7)Ruffles would muffle, tuffle, tuck and bounce. But eventually he would do it.
8)Tommy would rustle through the leaves and frollic through the grass.
9)Ruffles would trip, shuffle, boop and bop. But eventually, he would do it.
10)Something about today was different however.
The stones that crossed the narrow river where Tommy and Ruffles would pass through had been moved far far apart.
11)Tommy skipped across the stones with ease, but Ruffles had a much harder time.
"Come on Ruffles, I know you can do it! Just put a little wiggle into it!" Tommy cheered at Ruffles.
12)Ruffles weebled and wobbled on the stones, his paws slipping into the water. He grunted and growled and leaped with all his might.
13)"HORRAYY RUFFLES" Tommy exclaimed! The two friends jittered with with excitement.
14)Though ruffles was small and things were hard for him, he could do everything anyone else could do. It just took a little work.
For the illustrations I am wanting to show Tommy the boy and Ruffles the puppy playing and running and Ruffles flopping around.
The giraffe who was too tall
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On the first day of kindergarten all the animals arrived at school.
Their new teacher Mrs. Lamb welcomes them into her classroom.
But Grace the giraffe is too tall to get into the room!
"Oh no", says Grace. "What should I do?"
Mrs. Lamb comes out and shows Grace how to duck into the classroom.
Next the class goes out to recess and all the children start going down the slide.
But Grace the giraffe is too tall to play on the slide!
"Oh no", says Grace. "What should I do?"
Mrs. Lamb comes over and states "You're too tall for the slide Grace, maybe try hopscotch!"
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On the first day of kindergarten all the animals arrived at school.
Their new teacher Mrs. Lamb welcomes them into her classroom.
But Grace the giraffe is too tall to get into the room!
"Oh no", says Grace. "What should I do?"
Mrs. Lamb comes out and shows Grace how to duck into the classroom.
Next the class goes out to recess and all the children start going down the slide.
But Grace the giraffe is too tall to play on the slide!
"Oh no", says Grace. "What should I do?"
Mrs. Lamb comes over and states "You're too tall for the slide Grace, maybe try hopscotch!"
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